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This helped me because it forced me to go back through my script and i noticed i had been telling and not showing so i was not leaving it to the readers imagination i was telling them what was happening like a book.

This helped me because my script was hard to read and dysfunctional due to the lack of punctuation and it helped me realize some of the bigger problems with my script.

This helped me because my characters just appeared in my script leaving the reader with no idea of a backstory / where the came from / how old they are / what there job is.

Slugline is not correctly formatted. An action line is needed underneath every slugline to explain either location or how characters are moving within it. 

this helped me to format my sluglines correctly

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This helped make my script more understandable and have the correct format making it a better read,

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This helped me make my script better as my dialog is a lot more interesting now due to the added sluglines.